The Incomplete Song.

The Incomplete Song

Santa Monica Beach at Sunset.
The sky glows softly with hues of crimson and gold, the Pacific Ocean shimmering like liquid glass under the fading light. Waves roll in with a rhythm that feels ancient, eternal—whispering secrets to the shore.

On the promenade near the old pier, tourists laugh, lovers stroll hand-in-hand, and joggers drift past, lost in their own worlds.

Just off to the side, by a broken bench and an overflowing trash bin, sits an old man. His beard is wild, salt-and-pepper like the sand beneath him. His clothes are layered—some for warmth, some for memory. A pair of worn-out boots barely holds together around his feet.

Across his lap rests a guitar.
Scratched.
Weather-worn.
But tuned with love.

Every evening, without fail, he begins to strum—not for money, not for attention, but for the sunset. His music is soft, melancholic, unfinished. Locals say he was once a famous musician; others whisper that he lost someone. No one truly knows.

That evening, as the sun dips lower, a young woman stops. She's barefoot, holding her sandals in one hand, and her eyes—those curious, compassionate eyes—fix on the old man.

He plays.
She listens.

And for a brief, breathless moment, the world forgets to move.
It’s just him. Her. And a song… still waiting to be completed.

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